These are some heavily edited pages from my manuscript. You can see my scribbled handwriting marking out the detailed changes.
This scene involves the hero Matilda being visited by the Archangel Barachiel, who offers her the Blessing of God.
The Blessing of God ensures that no matter what "evil" a person does in life, they are guaranteed entry into heaven when they die.
Facing the consequences of your actions is a huge theme in this novella. This is the last battle of her life, and she faces once more the first evil she ever fought. It killed her father and her husband.
I really wanted a cyclical aspect to Matilda's life.
A while ago I wrote a query and submitted it to someone who reads queries and tells you if they are any good. This person commented on the fact that it sounded like Matilda was going to die.
She does die.
She nearly dies several times before getting to the last fight.
But sometimes it's not about surviving; it's the winning that counts.
I had a lot of fun with this scene because I was using existing Christian mythologies.
I went in a very stereotypical way with my angels; white swan-feather wings, handsome bare-chested men, flaming swords. Of course, my demons look very similar, with the exception of Sephyr (she's a demonic mermaid). My demons (being fallen angels) can appear as demonic or angelic as they wish.
If God has a Plan, if he is all-knowing and infallible, then he must have known about the Fall before the angels rebelled and became demons. If he did know, then God allows evil in the world. If God didn't know, then he isn't all-knowing.
I really like this scene. Once published, I hope some of you like it, too.